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You've put this in the critique section, and I don't think you want it to be ignored, so here goes ...
I'm glad to see you playing the mandolin. I think it's the best instrument for you.
I looked back at your recording from about ten weeks ago: https://fiddlerman.com/forum/s.....cond-wife/
It seems like you are playing a little faster now, and may be sticking better with the beat.
Your fingering is less systematic than it ought to be. For example, from 3:14 to 3:16, you use the third finger to play F# on the D string, then the second finger to play D on the A string. That is exactly backwards. To keep it simple, it should be approached like typing, so that for a given note, the same finger is always used. I find that in general, mandolin fingering is supposed to be the same as violin fingering. http://www.nigelgatherer.com/m...../tut6.html
I see you looking back and forth between the sheet and your fingers. But obviously you have some parts of it memorized. I think you already know what it is supposed to sound like, and you should put away the sheet and just try to play it. Don't worry about making mistakes in practice. You aren't supposed to be be performing it yet. You're supposed to be learning it. You'll make mistakes, but when you hear a mistake, you'll back up and play it again. And that is the best way I know of to learn to play be ear. I'll tell you that learning just one tune that way can have a very big payoff. For me it was Danny Boy. NGL would be a great one for you. By forcing yourself to find the right sounds, you build wiring between your fingers and your mind's ear. With that in mind, it becomes even more important and useful to make your fingering systematic, as I indicate in the preceding paragraph.