You need to have made a certain number ( I think it is 50 ) of posts before you can edit or delete messages - once you hit the magic number a couple of extra buttons will appear -

 ... at least that's what I sort of recall....

Cheers,

Bill

@Ripton - I think your're doing pretty well.     I have no specific advice/critique to offer really - I don't know enough yet to give meaningful feedback on technique.

I'm only really responding to comment on the difference between "what you hear as you are playing" and what you "hear when you listen to your recording".  I find this as well - not always - but often.   For my part, this is difficult to explain - but I'll try - so here I go...  what I find is this -

When I have "fewer things to concentrate on getting right" I am more aware of intonation issues whilst playing.  What I'm trying to say is that IF I can play the tune itself, in "automatic mode" (and play blindfold, or eyes closed) - that is without actually thinking about the fingering and what note to play next, or the bow position - THEN it is one less thing to concentrate on - AND because of that - I become more aware of intonation issues and can make pretty quick corrections - almost to the point of such "corrections" being fast enough to be un-noticeable.   And that is quite "strange" ( well, I find it strange ).

If I'm playing something I'm not yet 100% familiar with - I'll be "searching ahead" in my mind for the next note, trying to keep in time, trying to get the bow action correct, worrying about expression, and everything else.  The end result is that "there's just too much going on in my head" and if I have an intonation issue - I probably don't notice it unless I play the recording back. ( And of course, then I usually see all the other issues I'm having - which is a good thing ! )

However - directly relating to the intonation thing - "playing the perfect note" on a fretless (or indeed fretted, since it can and will change with pressure and position of the finger between frets and your personal "action") is generally never perfect. (Vibrato hides a lot !)  It just depends "how much it was out by" and how "sensitive the listener's ears are to "expected" pitch"....

Listening again to your piece, OK, in a couple of places, sure - but I wouldn't beat yourself about the head about it - end result - I thought it was pretty good. and thanks for the post !

EDIT : Oh I meant to say - I've recently started on STJ as well,  so that also was my interest in your post.   I'll post my attempt sometime soon - but I'll keep it clear of your own thread here (unless you want to make it an unofficial STJ party - hmmm I should check the various threads - I'm sure there was a Swallowtail group project, or members-project, or party, or something...  whatever... I'll find somewhere to post it..)